who can correct to me

[shoroog]

welcome,, I have a paragragh and I want some one make it an essay,And correct it
no problem if you want change words
add sentences or rearrange it ,

Important appointment
I and my friend went to a party
and we enjoyed there.I invited by my friend's sister. I asked permission to bring my friend.She allowed me that.My friend came my home,then, we gone together .The party was in their house.It was for her success. It was enjoyable.And while we busy with our friend,the clock strike three,it was But it was not this problem,the problem was that we had appointment with the bank to open a file .since we forgotten that banks usually shut so early ,so we do not had an other chance to morning.we got out after we asked permissin and thanked them for their inviting.Finally, we fareweel each other .Then,I went to a bed to got up early to our appointment

[حسن خليل]

This is quick correction to your paragraph

I and my friend went to a party
and we enjoyed there. I invited by my friend's sister. I asked her a permission to bring my friend. She agreed to bring my friend with me,,then, we went together .The party was in their house. It was for her success and it was enjoyable. while we were busy with our friends, the clock stroke three, it was not this problem, the problem was that we had an appointment with the bank to open a file .Since we have forgotten that the banks usually close so early ,so we do not have another choice to wait till next morning. We went out after we asked a permissin and thanked them for their inviting. Finally, we farewell each other .Then, I went to bed to get up early to our appointment

Best regards

Hassan Khalil

[shoroog]

I thank u too much my brother
but can u divide it to 2 or 3 paraghraphes..??
to make it an essay

[حسن خليل]

I and my friend went to a party
and we enjoyed there. I invited by my friend's sister. I asked her a permission to bring my friend. She agreed to bring my friend with me. Later on we went together

The party was in their house. It was for her success and it was enjoyable. while we were busy with our friends, the clock stroke three, it was not this problem, the problem was that we had an appointment with the bank to open a file

As we have forgotten that the banks usually close so early, so we do not have another choice to wait till next morning. We went out after we asked a permissin and thanked them for their inviting us. Finally, we farewell each other.Then, I went to bed early to get up next morning so I can fulfill my appointment

Best regards

Hassan Khalil

[shoroog]

thanks alot,sir
may god blessing for u..

[حسن خليل]

You are mostly welcome

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[shoroog]

you laughed me
thanks

[سهول]

My friend and I went a party which we enjoyed a lot. I was invited by one of my friend's sister. I took permission so that my friend can come a long with me. My friend came first to my house and then we went together. We enjoyed ourselves a lot, but forgot that we had an appointment to open a file in the bank. It was three o'clock and banks usually close early. We had no choice, but to wait till morning. Finally we decided to say goodbye after thanking them for the invitation. I went to bed early on that day so that I could wake up early in the morning and go to the bank.

[shoroog]

thanks my sister

[سهول]

Any time Shrooq

[سكروب 14]

waw!!!!
mr. hasan you are a smart man .

I will aske you about every thing in English .

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